Show Don't Tell

Hi guys,

Welcome back to my blog. Today I'm going to be sharing with you my hotspot writing.

We were given some very boring sentences and then we had to make them more exciting by putting them into descriptive sentences.

I thought it was very easy so I tried to make them a bit more descriptive.

Here is my work...

SHOW	Don’t Tell
Brian pursed his lips and clenched his fists into tight balls. Try as he might he could not contain himself. Within seconds he erupted like a volcano.	Brian was angry. He started to yell.
An ache started deep in his stomach. He turned away as his eyes welled up with tears.	Johnny felt sad.
Bailey was filled with laughter. It spread throughout the whole room.	Bailey was happy.
Jeremy's face was priceless when he saw his favorite ice cream in the whole entire world.	Jeremy was shocked.
	Tama was excited by the rugby match he was playing that afternoon.

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