Today I'm going to be sharing with you some writing that i have been working on about a young girl named Mai her and here friends live in a small town that is surrounded by a huge dome fence thing and one day when Mai is going for a walk she sees a hole in the fence so she meets up with here friends and they go on a big journey to find more human life and they come across a big birds egg they take it to a scientist and then they make there way back to there home and they are gifted something amazing but you will have to wait and see what they get.
Here is my work it is very long but it would be very appreciated if you were to read it all and give me some feed back. Just to let you know that I am still working on it there are two parts so read the first one.
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Great work Mea! You are writing an awesome novel! I like the way that you have described the setting and how you explained how Mai is feeling in different situations.
ReplyDeleteAt the end of part 1, it should say 'curse' but it says 'cruise', so you should change this. There are some other surface features that we can fix up after you complete your draft.
Keep up the amazing writing!
Mrs Hastie